वो रास्ता..
सच्चाईयों से मुँह फेरकर,
मुझपर तुम हँसते गए
दल-दल राह चुनी तुमने,
और गर्त तक धसते गए
खुद पर वश नहीं था तुम्हें ,
गैरों की प्रवाह में बहते गए
जाल बुनी थी मेरे लिए ही,
और खुद ही तुम फँसते गए
नमी सोखकर मेरे ही जमीं की,
गैरों की भूमि पर बरसते रहे
सतरंगी इंद्रधनुष कब खिले गगन में,
उस पल को अब हम तरसते रहे
……….अभय ………..
बहुत खूब—नमी सोखकर मेरे ही जमीं की,गैरों की भूमि पर बरसते रहे……
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हाँ, रचना के क्रम में यह पंक्ति लिखकर मुझे भी हर्ष हुआ! धन्यवाद मधुसूदन जी 🙏
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Beautifully written, each word in itself speak all.
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Thank you so much, I am pleased that it reached to you in healthy condition ☺️
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Nothing here to be unhealthy, it describe very beautifully how people use your goodness on name of relationships.
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Well it’s fictitious narrative ☺️
Thank you.
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Yes, mainly writing is fictitious only on base of what’s happening in surroundings 🙂
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Haan, You can say it! Even Newtown discovered gravity from the inspiration of surrounding. 😜
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बहुत ही अच्छा लिखा है। हर लाइन अपने आप में बेहतर है। मुझे तो समझ में नहीं आ रहा किस लाइन की तारीफ करूँ किस को छोड़ू। कुछ मिलाकर आपके कविता का भाव बहुत अच्छा लगा।
वैसे अभय जी केवल लाइक से मेरी रचनाओं के लिए काम नहीं चलने वाला। तारीफ के काबिल है कि नहीं पता नहीं आलोचना भी कर सकते हैं।
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*कुल मिलाकर
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शुक्रिया 😊
मैं कोशिश करूंगा कि आपकी लेखनी पर प्रतिक्रिया कर सकूँ! 🙏
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धन्यवाद अभय जी मेरी बात रखने के लिए।
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bahut hi badhiya abhay ji
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शुक्रिया 🙏
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Very beautiful..
Zindagi ka dastoor Kuch aisa he Hai, sang rehte humare parwah karte doosron ki Hai. Zameen par khila gulab ka paudha hota zameen see juda par phool hota kisi air ka.
Aaj Kal ke rishte bhi Kuch aise he Hai, jab tak mile humse kuch to hota humse juda warna hokar kisi aur ka humko chod Chala..
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वाह वाह! क्या उपमा दिया है आपने! जबरदस्त ☺️
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😊
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और हाँ, धन्यवाद ☺️
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ठीक लिखा है आपने. कहते भी है – दूसरो के लिये खोदे गड्डे में लोग खुद गिर जाते है.
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शुक्रिया रेखा जी 😊
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VERY GOOD THOUGHT EXPLAINED CLEARLY AND BEAUTIFULLY.
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Thank you
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Lajawab 👌🏻
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Thanks Buddy
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Bahut hi sundar prastuti.
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Thank you Bhai!
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Chunte hain log yunhi raste
Apni zindagi sanvarne vaste
Thappad jab miljati hai inhi raste
Mud chale aate hain hamare vaste
Adhay ko bhaya bhit rahit kahten hain
😂
Shiva🎶
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Wah wah!
Haan Abhay, means fearless ☺️
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Bohot khub -beautifully written👏
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Thank you 😊
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Welcome😊
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Behad umda….
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Shukriya
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bahut badhiya
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Shukriya
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MARVELLOUS 🤗
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शुक्रिया 🙏
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MOST WELCOME 🙌
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Your poetry is heart touching.Keep it up
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Thank you Payal Ji☺️
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Reblogged this on the ETERNAL tryst and commented:
Blast From the Past…
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Nice.
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Thanks
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